Haunted Short Film – Development

1st Draft: 

My first draft is the chase scene only as this scene took a long time to film, about 6 hours or more in total and is the main bulk of my film so I decided to film this first. I’ve edited it to make the scene dramatic and fast paced but need to make my shot durations shorter to heighten the tension for the audience.

Target audience feedback from this draft is in another post earlier in my blog.

2nd Draft:

I have made the shot durations shorter to create jump cuts which are a common convention if the action thriller genre. This also means that the shots have more impact on the audience as it makes the scene more dramatic and thrilling. However, I need to add my flashbacks into the chase scene to break it up and to keep the audience engaged. I also need to film and edit the other scenes and record the voiceover.

3rd Draft:

I have added the voiceover as well as the beginning and end scene making my film feel more complete. However, I still have a lot of improvements to complete. For example, the footage during the voiceover needs to be changed and synchronised with the music so that it also displays what the character is saying, which will result in my film being more effective and attention grabbing from the very beginning. I also need to film additional scenes to fill in the gaps for my film during the voiceover.

One of the main improvements I will make is that the scene after the voiceover isn’t realistic… my character looks like he has just been randomly dumped in a park! So, I will create the idea that he goes there to relax, his escape from life and his past by listening to ambient music, turning off his phone and relaxing listening to the birds. I will make this with long shot durations so that the scene feels peaceful, unlike the urgency created with short shot durations in the chase scene.

4th Draft: 

I have added more shots but I still need a few more, especially for the voiceover. I also need to make my film synchronised to the sound score and add in flashbacks to make the audience jump and change some of the sound score.

5th Draft:

I have added shots and ensured that they are in time with the sound (synchronous sound) and changed some of the sound used to make my film more dramatic. However, there is some audio which needs to be added.

Final Text:

I am very happy with my film overall. I have added pure black spaces to intensify the film overall and have added audio to engage the audience more and to make the different sections of the voiceover standout, e.g. I used intense thrillesque music over the top when the murder weapon was showing and the character was talking about rage.

Ancillary One – Film Review Progression

First Draft: 

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I used a screenshot in the film to give the audience a visual insight into the narrative of the film. However, I may change the picture to another screenshot image as this one isn’t very clear. I will improve the review itself to make it longer and more professional as well as adding a background.

Second Draft: 

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I have added a background which matches my film poster (creating synergy), changed the image to engage the audience immediately by breaking the fourth wall which would make them stop and focus on my film review in the magazine. I have changed the typography and added boxes to place the text on in order to make it stand out more and easier to read for the readers.

Audience Feedback:

I received audience feedback on my film review which was very helpful. These are two out of the six responses I’ve gotten.

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The main positive feedback I received was for the clarity of the image as well as the clear and easily readable text, ‘professional’ layout and a well structured article. However, it was pointed out that there were spelling mistakes which I will double-check and correct as well as grammar. Another piece of feedback I received was to put the writing on the background and not in the boxes however, I originally did this and it was very hard to read and I put the boxes there to make it more professional as many magazines do this and to also make it clearer and easier to read, otherwise the readers may give up and not finish the rest of the article.

Furthermore, when I printed it out I released how big the typography was, making it look unprofessional even though on-screen it looked normal and a professional size, highlighting how important it was to print it off.

Finally, I have decided (even though I didn’t get any improvements for it) to make my film review an A3 size as in the magazine it would have a double-page spread.

Third Draft:

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I have made it a A3 double page spread and added anchorage using the tagline from my poster ‘YOU CAN’T OUTRUN THE PAST’. Furthermore, I have added quotes from newspapers to make it more professional.

I will change the screenshot image on the left of the page to another from my film as I believe using a CU and ECU of the actors face and eyes is too much and makes it look unprofessional.

Fourth Draft:

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I have added more text and another review however I still need to change the image on the left page.

Fifth Draft: 

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Final Text:

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I have added pull quotes into the verdict to make it more professional as well as the ‘film review’ in the top left corner and then made the page numbers and verdict box the same colour to create synergy. I removed the ‘out may 30th’ which made it less crammed. Finally, I read through the article and fixed any spelling mistakes etc.

Ancillary Two – Film Poster Progression

First Draft:

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I like the image and typography on the poster however, I think I need to add a background and make the image black and white to make it suit my genre more.

Second Draft:

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I have improved my poster to make it fit the thriller genre more, including making the actors face black and white and adding a background image that makes it more effective.

Audience Feedback: 

I showed my poster to 6 people and these are two examples of the feedback I got.IMG_9178.jpg

The main strengths I got were for the background and main image as it is ‘very effective’ due to the colour scheme and clarity of the image. However, improvements that I got included adding credits which I plan to do as it will make it more professional as well as changing the typography for the ‘featuring Hamish MacKenzie’. Another improvement that I want to  make which wasn’t suggested to me is to remove the star rating on the poster as this isn’t professional.

Third Draft:

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I have changed my typography, added a release date and credits as well as removing the star rating which overall makes my poster look professional.

My favourite part is the image as it breaks the fourth wall and results in engaging the audience immediately.

Fourth Draft: 

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I have coloured the eye and word ‘past’ to create more questions in the audiences mind and to make the poster stand out more.

However, to improve my poster more I will superimpose a picture of the ‘villain’ in the background behind his shoulder to attract the audience more.

Fifth Draft:

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I have added an edited screenshot from my film of the antagonist to make the poster so that it looks more like a typical thriller and makes this clear to the audience. Furthermore, it make the title meaning clearer.

Final Text:

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Everything has been aligned and overall I am very happy with my product.